Okay, let's review the reasons this made Djinn squee:
1. You tell the story form Jack's perspective, which gives it a veery different tone than it would ahve had any other way, and a different perspective on the relationships, which is just perfect.
2. House and Wilson do very stupid thing (IMHO) in here, but you make it so we can almost understand and sympathize with their stupidity, and when a writer makes it so I can understand a character taking an action I hate, that's just plain good writing.
3. The narrative style is suited to Jack's age as he grows and gains a better understanding of the world around him. This leads almost to a sort of dramatic irony, where we understand things that Jack himself doesn't, and that's very powerful in the early parts of this fic.
4. You pay close attention even to minor characters, like Josh, Mary, and Leo--ever single person in this fic, no matter how breifly, is fleshed out enough that the reader feels as if they inerstand them, and how they effect the story.
You took what could have been a cliché (a kid!fic) and turned it into a heartbreaking masterpiece of characterization and storytelling. This is a beautiful fic, but you'll forgive me if I don't take it as canon--because that's way too depressing to even consider. This can be like, H/W in an alternate universe, okay? =P
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Okay, let's review the reasons this made Djinn squee:
1. You tell the story form Jack's perspective, which gives it a veery different tone than it would ahve had any other way, and a different perspective on the relationships, which is just perfect.
2. House and Wilson do very stupid thing (IMHO) in here, but you make it so we can almost understand and sympathize with their stupidity, and when a writer makes it so I can understand a character taking an action I hate, that's just plain good writing.
3. The narrative style is suited to Jack's age as he grows and gains a better understanding of the world around him. This leads almost to a sort of dramatic irony, where we understand things that Jack himself doesn't, and that's very powerful in the early parts of this fic.
4. You pay close attention even to minor characters, like Josh, Mary, and Leo--ever single person in this fic, no matter how breifly, is fleshed out enough that the reader feels as if they inerstand them, and how they effect the story.
You took what could have been a cliché (a kid!fic) and turned it into a heartbreaking masterpiece of characterization and storytelling. This is a beautiful fic, but you'll forgive me if I don't take it as canon--because that's way too depressing to even consider. This can be like, H/W in an alternate universe, okay? =P
xoxox
~your doting internet wife